Tuesday, 15 October 2013

Cover letters

http://theundercoverrecruiter.com/how-videogame-designers-job-interview-blunder-led-him-conquer-world/

Game design example cover letter:
http://www.letters.org/cover-letter/game-designer-cover-letter.html

Peter Zaragoza
4906 Clay Street
Indianapolis,IN
Zip:46254
Peter.J.Zaragoza@spambob.com
Phone: 317-404-6884

Randy Parker
Value City Department Stores Inc
1884 Layman Court
Roswell
GA



Date: 18-11-2010
Dear Mr.Parker,
I read about your need for Game Designer at Indianapolis from the JobCentral.com . I have an excellent track record in most of the work related areas you’re seeking in the prospective candidate.
My work experience includes:
  • Worked directly with the Art Directors on numerous projects, from start to finish, guaranteeing the games were keeping within there specifications and theme.
  • As lead artist, I ensured assigned projects were finished and completed on time.
  • Had the responsibility of taking older,
  • outdated games, and renovating them to compete with the newer, edger, games out on the market.
  • Generated marketing material for several titles in a timely and professional manner.
  • Conceived new concept ideas and implemented them for the front end and in game pla


I think this is the perfect place to take up new challenges and invite opportunities. For more details related to my education and experience you can get arrange an interview session with me.
Yours Sincerely
(Peter Zaragoza) 
What to include:

Write your name and address, Write Employer’s name and address, In first paragraph, include the information like why you are writing, position you are applying for and source of the job listing, In second paragraph, include the summary of your work experience, In third paragraph, thanks the employer and include the information about how you follow up.

Another good example:
http://www.kent.ac.uk/careers/cv/goodbadcovlet.htm

Rosalind Franklin
8 Russell Street
Cranford
Lancashire
MN22 8YY
rf333@hotmilk.com
7th February 2009
Mrs Matty Jenkyns
Personnel Manager
Manchester General Hospital
Hollbrook Avenue
Manchester
MN1 5BJ
Dear Mrs Jenkyns

 
Tries to find the name of the appropriate person to write to if possible
I am looking for a placement within a hospital environment from June to September of this year. I am writing to you as I understand that Manchester General Hospital may have appropriate vacancies available. I have a strong interest in laboratory procedures and clinical diagnostics which I understand are predominantly carried out at this hospital. As I live only 5 miles from your site, travel and accommodation would not be a problem for me.

 
States the job she's applying for.
States when she's available to start and end the placement
I first became interested in the hospital environment after a school visit to your site.  I was taken on a tour around the laboratories where the differing techniques used in testing clinical samples for patients were demonstrated.  Since then, discussion with my careers adviser has confirmed my decision to aim for a career in this field.

 
Says why she's interested in the type of work
Through my degree course, I have been able to develop my interest in biochemistry, whilst improving my laboratory skills along with my numeracy skills. I have gained some experience in HPLC and have good computing skills, having used several scientific databases. I achieved 68% in my first year examinations and am hoping to achieve a high 2:1 for my course work this year. While at University, I have also been able to utilise my skills in working with people through a variety of vacation jobs. My work at a busy insurance office was valuable in teaching me the importance of ascertaining customers’ needs and providing clear and accurate information.

 
Summarises her strengths and how they might be an advantage to the organisation.
Relob.ates her skills to the j
I would be most grateful if you could consider me for any suitable positions. I will be available for interview at any time and am at my home address in Cranford from late May onwards. At all other times I can be contacted at my college address. Please find enclosed my CV where you will find further information.
Yours sincerely

Rosalind Franklin



Bad Example



Dear Sir or Madman

  • Doesn't give the name of the person he's applying to. It's not essential to do this, but may suggest a slight lack of initiative. Hasn't proof read the letter.
I am about to complete my English and American Literature degree at the University of Kent, with a prospective result of a 2:1.
As a literature student, I have a strong love of books of all types and see work in a bookshop as a career area which would be a good starting point for a career in publishing which is my eventual career aim.

  • Admits that bookselling is not what he really wants to do.
  • Repeats the word career three times in one sentence.
I have good experience of retail, having worked as a shelf stacker for Sainsburies. I have studied modules in Shakespeare, War Poets, Dickens and Creative Writing all of which I feel give me valuable knowledge. My interests include reading, playing computer games and stamp collecting and I am currently reading Robbie Williams' thought-provoking autobiography.

  • Hardly relevant experience! No mention of any experience working in a team or serving customers. Comes across as a passive loner.
I am writing speculatively in the hope that you may consider me for any full-time vacancies that may arise in your store. I'm interested especialy in the retail side of a bookstore: interacting with customers and seeing where the modern tastes for literature lay.

  • Spelling mistake: hasn't used a spell checker and not really forgivable for someone who has studied a literature degree
I would be available to work from the beginning of June of this year. I have previous retail experience and believe that this, combined with my knowledge of and interest in books could be rewarding both to your store and to myself.
Yours faithfully

Frank Harrison

  • A lot of repetition here. States again about his love of books and his previous retail experience.

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